This was written feedback

I was given lots of positive feedback, notably my decision to concentrate on Minor White as the artist for the case study, and my decision to drop John Blakemore.

See the constructive feedback given which needs action:

I noted in my A4 Learning log that I now included in my Chapter 3, images of White’s work to articulate how he uses affect in his work; this I have done to help my readers to synthesise both the information on visual methodologies I present in my dissertation and how it can be applied to interpreting meaning in images. I have used a semiotic toolkit and knowledge of symbols White uses to pick apart some of his images – In my dissertation I am applying methods I researched in my literature review. I have described some of what is denoted and connotated in the images, however I note that my tutor suggests that I add further description on what is denoted in them, to enable viewers to give readers space to ask questions.

REFLECTIVE LEARNING LOG : Show what I’ve learnt- not a description of process

DISSERTATION

General advice:

Use PEEL: Paint/Explain/Link back to research question. I’m obviously I’m still not getting there – intro to all terms with clear definitions supported not lead by references and theories.

USE REFERENCES TO UNDERPIN OWN POINTS and to clarify research methods or difficult themes – So do some “reverse engineering”

Also:

• Ensure writing makes sense to a reader coming to it cold
• Some places are quite dense.
• There are some short paragraphs that would be better linked to create flow paragraphs that need linking
• Try using an academic phrasebook
• Check that it all makes sense to another reader.
• Expand where critical terms need explain to a general reader
• Ensure I reference practitioners I mention.

Content:

• Expand on ‘Context as determinant of meaning’
• Reread Clarkson on codes and Bate (2009) p 34 on codes and rhetoric
• Add more on objective photographers eg. Blossfeldt, Evans, Rineke Dijkstra
• On sequencing images add Colborg reading
• Describe images – Denotation into connotationsee Barrett formulansubject+medium+form+context (what’s it about)

Reference:

Bate, D. (2009) Photography: The Key Concepts. New York: Berg publishers.

Colberg, J. (February 26 2018) Towards a Photobook Taxonomy. At: https://cphmag.com/photobook-taxonomy/ (Accessed 31/10/2021).