This learning log entry documents changes that I made to my final submission following Tutor and peer feedback

I now need to ensure that my intention for the work, combined with feedback from others meets the learning outcomes for the unit. To do this I must review and ensure any changes support:

• Producing a convincing visual project
• Communicating my intentions
• Use accomplished techniques.
• Show the above in a complex environment.
• Transform abstract concepts into rich narratives.

Review of my images

Taking on board advice from my peers and my tutor, I should now review, reduce, and therefore strengthen the series of images that I share in my major project portfolio. This will help to ensure that I am communicating what I intend.

Reviewing my draft A5 submission I edited the images again focussing on the images alone at first, rather than as images for a final product.

My original product had 14 images, I wanted to make a tighter set of main images. First I removed the greener “rebirth images,” which I have decided I won’t use at this point but may incorporate later in SYP. So omitted: #11, #12, #13, #14.

Then I rejected images #7, #8, & #9, as they are lesser immersive woodland images.

I added an image that I had earlier rejected (now #6) and reordered #1, #2, #3, #4, #5, #6, #10 and the new image to form a series of 8 images. Ultimately I rejected image #10 to form a final group of 7.

The final order for the images were 1) #3, 2) #1, 3) #4, 4) #2, 5) #6, 6) new, 7) #5.

See submission editing padlet: https://oca.padlet.org/nicola514516/revised-bow-a5-submission-image-edits-w07q1li6855xas1o

My editing was harsh, I really stepped back and reviewed my whole body of work, which did result in my redacting some of my later images. However, I am now pleased with the remaining images as they form a strong and cohesive group, as well as each being strong images each themselves.

Next my presentation of this series transforms these images which represent my abstract concepts into a narrative for the viewer.

Review of my method of presentation for assessment  

During feedback, my Tutor focused, and in turn focused me on my images, rather than my method of presentation of them. This changed my perspective for the presentation of my work for assessment. Reviewing my presentation against the learning outcomes now, I can see that my book dummy was over complicated. I need to focus on more simple narration of my abstract ideas, but include some signposting to help convey my intention.

Having edited down to seven main images for what lies beneath and eight images with definitions for various components of the community, I have decided that I will present these as a slideshow rather than a book at this stage. This will simplify the presentation around the images, and as my tutor said, “let the images speak for themselves.”  

My power point slideshow will include:

• Two sections of introduction split into an introduction to the work and an introduction to the influences on the work
• Seven main images.
• Six poetry couplets to accompany the main images.
• Eight images of components of the woodland community, presented as footnotes.

Whilst making my slideshow I carefully considered the font, text size and placement.

Change of project name: At some point during reviewing these elements of the work it occurred to me that the project name would be better returned to ‘What lies ‘beneath’ rather than ‘within’ – beneath is a better description I feel, as it points more to the invisible. This is the term I used when composing the poetry, and up to assignment 4.

Now this is done I will turn to the other elements needed for Submission for assessment.