This was written feedback.

The overall feedback was that my title/research question needs firming up to ensure that it’s not too broad; but that it was useful work and generally reads well.

General advice given:

• Write as if to a general reader, be analytical and concise, and get to the point fast.

Actions:

For Literature review and dissertation

• Label files:PH6CTS -2 Literature review and include name (I think he means in the file name)
• Redraft my dissertation planner in the light of Tutors comments
• Add some examples of case studies and images to my historical account of semiotics
• Integrate the practice of chosen photographers to my examples of semiotics and discourse analysis.
• Tackle the effect of audience in the conclusion when bringing other strands together.
• Emphasis the caveat that Saussurian linguistic semiotics needs further development for a proper understanding of the nature of visual signification
• Include Pierce’s triangular model.
• Read additional suggestions from Tutor.

For Dissertation proposal:

• Reframe the title/questions
• Redraft the planner including the effect of the audience on interpretation in the conclusion.
• Omit the bibliography from the proposal document; it is only needed for the Literature review.

Comments on my evidence against learning outcomes:

LO1 undertaken research and study demonstrating comprehensive knowledge of your area of specialisation and built a theoretical framework for your creative practice

• Here I should evidence my research methodologies, semiotics leading to discourse analysis and case studies (Practise research) on artists.

LO2 synthesised and articulated your critical, contextual, and conceptual knowledge and understanding into a coherent critique of advanced academic standard

• I’m getting there but needs firming up

LO3 applied your own criteria of judgement, reviewed, criticised and taken responsibility for your own work with minimum guidance

• Good that I identified that Saussurian semiotics needs further development for a good understanding of visual signification.

LO4 selected and applied information management skills and used appropriate technology in the production of an accomplished critique with minimal supervision

• Tutor gave some suggestions for further reading on affect/effect.

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